Snow snow,
Let it snow away.
A blanket of white to lull me to sleep.
Touch my skin,
Preserve my cells,
But only until you fades.
Goddess and God,
Do not worry for my pain.
I no longer feel a thing.
Let the frozen tears cover
And wash away my body’s tears.
Scatter salt upon the snow.
My wounds will scar anyways.
Snow snow,
May it snow,
It will be the last that will touch me.
I'm not sure if you should use "tears" twice to describe something different. Maybe use a different metaphor?
ReplyDelete"Preserve my cells/But only until it fades away" I'm a little confused by these two lines.
Ah. That line was actually a typo. Thanks for bringing my notice to it.
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